DREAMS
One summer's day Holly woke up in the middle of the night, her Mum came in and said are you okay Holly why are u up at this time, im fine Mum i just feel sick, ok hun just go back to sleep un you have school tomorrow. It was morning and Holly was getting ready for school she was happy she gets to see her mates because she hasn't seen them for six weeks and she was really missing them.Holly time to go said Mum, she dropped her off outside school gates thanks Mum said holly.She took a deep breath and walked into class , the Teacher said today we're going to see what you want to do when you grow up, so who would like to go first?. Holly what about you? I'm okay miss , don't be silly come on up here, okay miss so when i'm older id like to be a support worker id like to help the kids have another chance. Thats silly u can't even stay calm said the Teacher, how can u help others if u can't help yourself ha ha everyone laughed Holly ran out of school and ran home to my bedroom my Mum said are u okay hun whats up? i'm fine just leave me alone but she wasn't fine she was crying. Holly didnt go in school next day she was too scared to, the Teacher came to the house and said to my Mum where's Holly why wan't she in school today??.I don't know said Mum, is it because of what i said to her i didn't mean to be mean but its the truth, what u on about ? said mum, i told her she couldn't be a support. WHAT !!! why would u tell a little girl and ruin her dream she can be what she want's to be i think u should leave !! I'm sorry but she has to wake up and see the truth she finishes school in a few weeks she has come to the real world . Holly are you okay i heard what your Teacher said she's wrong u can be whatever u put your mind to , you are a hard worker and u stick to it and u will get there i believe in u i believe u can do it come down for something to eat your need to eat. So i went down stairs with Mum and got something to eat. Holly don't let people bring you down your lovely and can do anything keep going head held high, thanks Mum love you, i love you too love now go get some sleep u have school tomorrow, okay night Mum. She woke up next day and thought to herself i can do this i can be what i want. She went to school and said to teacher i'm sorry u don't believe i can do it but i'm going to prove u wrong and show you i can, well i like that your not giving up. So Holly then next few weeks went out to find a job, it was hard but she did it and has been working there for 2 years now and her Mum was so proud. One day she gets two kids a boy and a girl and they say u knew my Mum then there mum walked through the door it was her old teacher the one who said she couldnt do it she proved her wrong the teacher came to say sorry that she didn't believe Holly, its okay i forgive u just make sure u show your kids they can do anything they put there mind too. Ever since that Holly has never given up on a child that had problems she was helping them with . THE END
Very good first draft you work really hard on this story but now we need to take a good look at your grammar
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